The Rag Temple (Complete)

 The Rag Temple

Kara’skance and Makoum are the strange protectors of a dilapidated temple in the middle of nowhere.  They would have passed through eternity as insignificant if not for one fateful night.

Status: Work-In-Progress (Scroll down to the * for the update if you have read the first installment), un-beta-ed, please comment if you notice any grammar/spelling mistakes and such or have any constructive criticism.  I’ve worked in sales, I have thick skin.

Warnings: Images and description of mild nudity and later scenes of violence.  I would rate it a PG-13 if not for the boob in the picture below, as such read it at your own discretion.

____________________________________________________ The Temple of Rags was once a little known temple, high in the Askaroth mountains, it is now quite forgotten by all but the two guardian guilds.  Because of it’s low status, many would question the validity of its having one powerful guardian, let alone two, but two it does have.

The Guardians of The Rag Temple

Kara’skance sat perched just outside of the door, keeping watch for visitors.  As far as  chaos angels went, she wasn’t particularly beautiful.  Her vibrant hair was hacked short and she had only five tattoos, the customary three around her eyes marking her family and status.  The other two were more unusual, a black sun blazon across her right shoulder and a black moon rising on her collar bone.  The moon was very small for such a potent symbol of power, but she had never been one for vanity.  She wore no clothes or trappings of human modesty, her shame was hidden by a guardian cap and a halo she had inherited from her predecessor in the traditional manner.  In comparison to the thick, bold halos of the younger guardians in the grand temple of the south, Kara’skance’s seemed weak with it’s delicate curls. “You’ll get cold sitting out here.”  He always said that even though she never did, even this late in the year. “I can feel something coming.”  It had started as a tingle in her fingers and toes this last week and had now evolved into a bitter taste on the tip of her tongue.  It grew sharper and more acrid the closer It got. “Probably just a pilgrim.”  She felt the rolling heat of ancient magic slide up behind her.  Makoum had been at the temple long before her, possible long before it had been built.  He often joked he would be there long after the rags had turned to dust.  “Or it’s another flock of ja’jah birds.”  His tongue lumbered around each syllable clumsily.  Kara’skance was always openly amused and secretly flattered by how much effort he put into physical speech, most of his kind never bothered.  She no longer teased him about it, the last time she had she had woken up with six poisonous trakar in her bed.  It had taken two weeks of vomiting in order to clear her system.  Makoum had, of course, denied all knowledge of the incident, but there had been a decidedly smug shine to his scales. “No, not this time.  It will be here in time for Tonar.”  She was certain.  Makoum’s chest rumbled as he yawned. “Then I still have time for a nap.”  With that he floated back inside.  Kara’skance knew she’d find him coiled on the alter rags.  When she first arrived she had found this blatant abuse repellent.  Over the years she had realised that, try as she might, she could not get the dragon to sleep anywhere else.  “I refuse to sleep on those itchy pile of twigs you call a mattress,” he would say haughtily, “besides when you are as old as the very heart of the earth you can sleep wherever you damned well please, you upstart scrappling.” Kara’skance pulled her wings around her and was so still for a moment it seemed she had become part of the mountainside itself.  Tonar was several hours away and she had yet to sweep the temple floors, but for the moment she was glued to the spot by a sense of futile dread. As the day wore on, the floors were cleaned.  The temples only two inhabitants had they’re usual meal of bread, milk and honey for Makoum.  Then as the day became night and the hours of Tonar approached the bitter taste in the back of Kara’sknce’s throat became a cold burn behind the eyes. “It will be here soon.”  She announced as she drifted down to sit in her customary position, cross-legged in front of the alter, where Makoum dozed.  When the wind chimes signaled the beginning of Tonar and the door burst open, this was how It found them. For humans and other mortal creatures the day begins when the sun rises and ends when it gives way to the moon, night then reigns and in between are the wavering moments of dusk and dawn.  For creatures of the the Time Before, there is no such division, however they too mark the passing of time from one planetary rotation to the next.  To them this moment is known as Tonar, a time of passing.  In human terms this moment varies minutely due to the ongoing tug of war between order and chaos but it always falls between the hours of three and four, when most mortal beings sleep. At this time the barriers surrounding the residual pieces of what is left of the Time Before are weakest, and as such the creatures created there are strong.  Strong but unstable.  They see things that came before, that will come and what lies beneath the thin layer of reason and logic that holds our world together. Tonar was when Kara’skance had fallen to the earth and the time when Makoum had first burst from the depths of it.  In this hour they could hear their brothers and sisters whispering in their ears from great distances, and this particular night they were screaming.  In this hour It had escaped from the depths where they had captured it. It was as old as Makoum, possibly older, although Makoum would never admit so.  Nothing from the Time Before was innately evil, they were just raw and desperate and terrified of becoming tame.  It was no exception, wilder than most perhaps, but really not so different.  If It had eyes, Kara’skance could not bear to meet them from where she knelt on the floor.  Makoum could not look away as he rose to his full, glorious height on the alter. “Maaaakoum, I wondered what structure of sophistry I would find you in.”  Kara’skance winced at the awful laugh that book-ended the simple statement.  She felt her insides crawl, shift and settle only when the last echoes had died on the stone floors.  She had cleaned them today, it would not do to dirty them so quickly. Do not turn around, srappling, not until I tell you to.  Kara’skance was rocked with the feeling of scales sliding accross her frontal lobe, it was so rare that Makoum used mind-speak, that she often forgot that he could.  A bubbly feeling made her eyes fizz as he caught her surprise.  He was laughing at her, the insufferable lizard. “Cah’ahrth, what ill wind freed you from your chambers?” “Chambers?  CHAMBERS?”  The temple shook and tiles fell from the ceiling above coming down so close to Kara’skance that she was sure she felt the resultant breeze in the tips of her primaries.  “Those rotten caves weren’t fit for a blind ass.”  Kara’skance winced again, that giggle, that pulled the liquid in her eyes making her see supernovas as small as slugs.  “No Maaaakoum, I have decided to return to my rightful place.”  It laughed and her feathers turned to fire, then glass and back to down. “I cannot allow that.”  Makoum’s great body shifted and became a mighty ‘S’ poised to strike.  His big fists and claws, which Kara’skance had only ever thought were for swatting flies, rendered the decorative edges of the alter to slivers and powder.  Kara’skance tried to find the stillness she had held so easily earlier in the day as another booming giggle ripped her scalp from her spine and pulled it down her spine. I am chaos, she thought desperately, I will not surrender to it; it is me.  She fought it, the laughter that sang in her blood.  This is not suicide, It whispered on the tips of her eyelashes, this is rebirth.  As she fought and fought the laughter that threatened to pull her from existence she heard it, descending into the corner of the mind that keeps a being away from dreams.  It settled there, blanketing her with calm. Now.

*

The air shivered as Kara’skance launched herself at the source of the malicious voice, but instead of feeling supernatural rip beneath her fingers and blood in her mouth she felt only displaced air on her face.  She was moving to fast, having used her wings to add speed to her attack, and she went careening into the unforgiving floor.  She was out of practice, she knew she should have insisted upon regular sparring sessions as per regulations, but she couldn’t even get Makoum to sleep in an appropriate bed. She pushed her self up, turning quickly, ready to launch another attack, and finally she saw It.  When she had moved suddenly, It had darted to the left, only to be caught in Makoum’s formidable jaws.  That was the first time she saw It, writhing there, making a sound not dissimilar to a dying helfior calf.  It would have appeared to many as an old man, withered and gnarled with time and a hateful life.  It’s physical skin was pale and marbled with dark veins through which putrid blood flowed, thick and viscous like the sap from a ruptured tree.  It’s eyes bulged with anger or fear, it was hard to tell, and Kara’skance had learned early in her time on his world, that one could often be mistaken for the other. But that was only the form it had chosen to travel in, around the edges Kara’skance could see something else, twisting on a higher frequency.  Her eyes ached as she gazed upon it, but for the first time since she had felt the tingling in her toes this morning her heart leapt.  She wooped in victory and began to weave a cage to store It in when it suddenly expanded.  Makoum’s jaws only stretched wider, holding fast.  It then contracted, becoming smaller, loosing It’s physical shape to become a miasmic clump.  But still Makoum held fast although he thrashed across the temple floor. “Calm down Makoum, the cage is finished.”  Kara’skance called, stepping back to examine her work for visible signs of weakness.  It spread across the floor like a carved star-map.  Great gouges in the floor described the whole of space and time and yest held it’s captive somewhere quite beyond all that entailed.  “Makoum bring him here, it’s finished Makoum, stop playing with your food.” Too late she realised, the thing, Cah’ahrth Makoum had called It, was not contracting.  It was pouring itself into Makoum, pervading every particle of his being.  From his amorphous brain to the smallest scale at the tip of his tail.  It poured itself down Makoum’s open throat as Kara’skance could only watch in horror.  When it had dissappeared Makoum lay upon the temple floor shuddering, wheezing, eyes closed tight in pain.  If he had been a man or an angel Kara’skance thought he would have been drenched with sweat, as it was his scales puffed out as if he was trying to intimidate some hidden foe. “Makoum!”  She rushed forward, anxious for her friend’s well being. Get back!  It was soft, a mere suggestion of the words compared to the certainty they had carried earlier, like when you almost remember a name but can’t quite push it past your lips.  When he opened his eyes to look at her he was no longer Makoum.  There was no physical change, but she saw It there, vibrating at the edges. In her anger she flung herself forward, only narrowly avoiding the cage had laid in front of the alter, rising above it at the last moment. “Get out of him!”  Her nails raked futility across hard scales, however she landed a firm bite to the inside of one of his upper arms, where she knew it would hurt but cause no lasting damage.  Cah’ahrth roared and she was swatted from the air and clutched tight in claw.  It then squeezed, laughing low and she thought she felt her lungs ooze into her throat. “Fooooolish little pesssst.”  It hissed, the voice was transformed by Makoum’s vocal chords and his enormous tongue, which snaked out to flicker across her forehead and cheeks, but it was still unmistakably the monster who had infected her friend.  He then took both her ankles in the other claw and smacked head first into the hard floor.  One, two, three hundred stars appeared. “Did you think I had come aaaall this way sssssimply to see my old friend Maaakoum?”  Her ears crackled with the sound of bells and her head swam. “Sorry,” she spat out the blood in her mouth, “did you say something?”  It gave her another smack on the floor and then dangled her in front of not-Makoum’s face until her refocused. “Do you remember a time when this place had pilgrims?”  Kara’skance started to nod, but that only made her feel sick, so she answered, pleased with how strong her voice sounded to her own ears in the quite of the night. “Yes.”  The line, in the beginning of her assignment here had stretched down the mountain side. “They didn’t all place offerings on the alter did they?” No some had come with binding rituals, the older ones had sometimes bypassed the temple altogether and gone straight for the small hotsprings outside.  They didn’t sit in them, no one ever did.  Oh gods!  How can I have been so stupid? “It’s an exit point.”  Her voice wavered under the sudden fear her epiphany left in it’s wake. “Veeeeery goooood little pesssst.  I wassss staaaarting to think you haaaaad neither braaaains nor braaaaawn, but I can sssssee now you haaaaave a little of one, if not much of the other.” Kara’skance didn’t listen to the back-handed compliment.  The screams from earlier were back, and playing in discordance with the blood rushing into her head.  They morphed into shouts. Do something!  Stop It!  Or else… “I’m going hoooome.”  It whispered it’s tongue flicking along the moon at her collar bone.

*

“You can’t!” “I caaaan.”  He sounded, young, sweet and tuneful. “I won’t let you.” “Hoooow will you sssstop me?  You aaaare alone and weak.  Makooooum wassss weak and paaaathetic and now he issss gone.  Ssssoon all this will be gone, it will dessssscend into the chaaaaos aaaas is right, RIGHT.  Look aaaat you, you aaaare a sssshadow of foooormer glorrrry, when yoooou fell yoooou became nothing. I refusssse to exist like thissss, rejected and forgotten by these repulsive moooortaaaals who haaaad the audaaaacity to dream meeee into this woooorld and then ignoooore their ressssponsibility becaaaause it’s cheaper toooo shut their eyessss and think about theiiiir comfoooort, theiiiir convenience.  Whaaaat has haaaappened to compaaaassion?  What has haaaappened to meeee.”  Saliva dripped from not-Makoum’s mouth.  It still held her in once claw, but It now used the other to pluck her feathers out.  It pulled each individual one, slowly, waiting for the point when wing became lone feather, emphasizing each syllable. “You have become disgusting, corrupted.”  Kara’skance wheezed. “If I aaaam disgussssting it is becaaaause they have maaaade me thaaaat way.  I wassss pure and haaaappy and loving, it issss they whoooo have made meeee cruel, it is thesssse creatuuuures who haaaave twissssted me to suit theirrrr ends.  But not anymooooore, no, no, no, I’m going baaaack to the Time Before.” You would be mistaken for the Time Before was an era.  It is hard to describe in human terms, but if you were to try, it would be closer to a place that existed before, after, during, in harmony and in opposition to the world you see and hear.    The magic in this world, is chaos, or the tiny amounts of it left behind when logic randomly first came to be.  Creatures could come from there, sporadically and almost exclusively accidentally and during the times of Tonar, when the logic and chaos merged.  While everything could and would eventually descend back into chaos when it’s time came, creatures could not return at will.  If they could Kara’skance would be first in line. Each creature comes into the world in a manner unique for them.  For chaos angels, it usually involved a fall, either physical or from a disordered sort of grace.  Like dragons they would never truly know the purpose of their arrival.  It, however, knew why It had been pulled from their welter.  For many they would be welcome, however sometimes, the fall from grace could occur upon or after arrival.  If you can imagine being rejected from your family for the nature of your soul, then you can begin to understand the pain It felt. Normally Kara’skance revelled in the electric charge that filled the air during the times of Tonar.  Some of her more changable sisters had adopted the human custom of wearing clothes, in order to emulate them or to fit in, Kara’skance didn’t know, and she would never truly understand.  She didn’t want to cut herself off from the last remnants of the Time Before.  She welcomed the rush of it, even the ache it left behind.  It reminded her that some things were eternal, whether you welcomed them or not. Tonight, however, it filled her with he was dragged out into the courtyard behind the temple.  It was protected by a high walls on either side and a sheer drop at the end.  There was little vegetation there.  What could grow was sparse and disfigured, they survived barely in the oppressive presence of the relic.  Every temple had one, if anyone visited the Rag Temple many thought it was the altar, but the true power lurked here.  An enormous skeleton tree, petrified with age rose above the wilted dandelions and weeds.  It had sprouted in the Time before and had not flowered in milennia.  Instead of leaves, it’s branches held threads.  Each one held the dream of a single pilgrim who had sought salvation here.  Time and the elements had matted them into inelegant clumps.  This was the original temple. Kara’skance was hurled at the foot of the tree.  She curled into it’s enormous trunk, momentarily hoping that it would shelter her from the certainty that she wouldn’t see the dawn. “Diiig!”  It spat at her. “How about you go fuck yourself?”  Not-Makoum’s tail whipped across her back, catching her upper arms and the sensitive join of wing and shoulder.   This time she could bite back the cry of pain, but she regretted her weakness when It chuckled.  He commanded she dig again, and every time she refused he whipped her, until her hand moved involuntarily.  Her fingers pulled the soil, damp as if the tree had been watered at dusk, although she knew that was not possible.  It clung to her flesh accusingly, marking her shame. By the time she reached what It was looking for, her wings shuddered with signs of exhaustion and her nail beds were torn and bloody.  The moonstone was a soothing balm, innocuous in it’s raw form.  This was her last chance for redemption and she seized it, the entire future of the logical world hidden in her grasp. “Whaaaat haaaave you got there little pesssst?”  It stalked towards her.  With her last remaining strength Kara’skance had she flew, higher then her muscles would allow, higher then should be possible with the remaining feathers she had left, and only just higher the It’s jaws.  She landed badly and felt her ankle snap, but she surged onward.  She didn’t have to make it down the mountain, just to the other side of the altar. It roared in frustration, and she could feel the heat of it’s breath.  But she could see her sanctuary, her salvation in sight.  She jumped, putting pressure on her ankle that it couldn’t take, but she had left her body and she was soaring, watching Makoum’s final moments beneath as she crowed in victory. by the time It realised what she had done, the cage had already begun to collapse inward.  It had only taken the light touch of a single claw to activate it, the symbols coming alive, swarming up it’s scales.  She crashed back into her body as the last scale turned to stone.  On Makoum’s face was an expression of pure hate, so at odds with the lazy, self-satisfied creature she had know.  She pulled herself across the floor, unable to stand now that she had accomplished what she needed to. She died on the floor, body bent, dirty and broken.  She would remain there until years later her decade remains would be found and buried, along with the moonstone, beneath the rag tree, only to be forgotten, like so many of her peers. ___________________________________________________________

I hope you have enjoyed this little tale, it is not much, but considering it started life as a desire to fill a blank page with doodles I am very pleased with how it turned out.  This is the first time I have come up with an illustration before forming a concept in words.  It’s a mash up of lots of other stories I have tried to finish in the past but never got round to. Still to come (read no further all ye’ who detest spoilers): The true nature of Makoum is revealed

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The Fisherman’s Forfeit

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So it’s the Virgin Media Short’s time of year again, and this year I was drafted by two plucky young film makers to enhance a oceanic deities costume and props. I thought I’d share the final result with you all. Please, go view and if you enjoy pass it on like a embarrassing secret or a mild cold.

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I think my Robert Plant is giving me the finger

 

I have recently decided that it would be good for me to have some plants in my room.  As with all changes in lifestyle I have started out strong, but who knows where I’ll be in three months time, probably with three desolate plant pots.  

Anyway I have started to begin with the kind of plants that should be easy to cultivate.  My first was of course an orchid, that was a gift when I received my new job, and after nearly two whole weeks, it seems to still be flowering quite happily.  It’s nothing special, just one of the white variety that can be bought in any Marks and Sparks within the UK.  However, despite it’s commonality I have decided to name it, in fact I have named all my plants, according to their appearance and conversational skills.  The orchid shall be here known as Isobel, she’s a bit old fashioned but very pleasant.ImageThe next two additions to my small room are a silver squill and a bonsai tree.  The bonsai tree, strictly speaking isn’t mine.  I am simply reviving it on behalf of my sister, so he has yet to receive a name, naming other peoples houseplants is entirely rude and not a little crazy.

The silver squill on the other hand is mine and challenged me today when it demanded larger living quarters when some of the roots began breaking out during a fit of teenage rebellion.  I have decided to name her Nina, as she is a bit of a diva, and rightly so.  Now that she has settled into her new abode she has stared sprouting little flowers.  They are terribly delicate and quite lovely, the stems are very fine and look almost like glass.  

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I do however have a problem child currently.  At my Dad’s insistence I have decided to name him Robert (as in Robert Plant, hahahaha, very funny dad).  He is a rather worrisome Aloe Vera, and has recently started going brown.  He was rescued from my lovely step-mother’s house, who in turn rescued it from my grandad’s house.  He had begun sprouting some new leaves (the ones he had were in a rather sorry state indeed) when the largest of the original leaves started going brown and a little limp.  I dutifully watered it, but not too much as I know they are desert plants.  Turns out after a little careful research desert plants can apparently suffer from too much sun, who knew.  He has since been relocated to a bright but guard corner of my room, unfortunately, now it looks kind of like he’s telling me to go prune myself.  Go figure.

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Sorry it hasn’t been a very witty post, but with the sudden onset of the summer, it seems like I have remembered how much I like the beach and garden.  As a result I haven’t had the y to do anything embarrassing.  As soon as it goes back to the normal rain I’m sure I will do something highly entertaining, and when I do, I will share.  In the meantime, stay watered!

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It’s about standards! (of the Jazz variety)

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What happened to the standards?  No not the kind maintained by form tutors and employers everywhere, I mean the musical variety.  Maybe I’m listening to the wrong radio stations or hanging around with the wrong kind of musicians, but it seems to me that they’ve fallen out of vogue in recent decades.

For those of you who are perhaps too young (and weren’t exposed to monologues on music from parental units at an early age) the jazz standard (not necessarily performed or written by jazz artists) used to be an integral part of jazz musicians repertoire.  The idea is they are well loved by the audience, if you find your self in a strange jazz band, everyone knows the same songs.  Although there is no official directory of Jazz standards, many tend to be old musical numbers or originating from Tin Pan Alley.

At first I thought it must be people are more into performing original music these days, which is true, but there are a number of mainstream super-bands who perform other peoples music.  Then I thought perhaps with the agonising decline of variety shows, they have somewhat lost their place.

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It’s an interesting thought (no really it is… it is!  well at least I find it interesting), the link between variety and standards.  I don’t think it’s particularly concrete, variety is such an enormous umbrella, and although I’m pretty sure standards would have been part of the repertoire for some artists, they themselves are further reaching then that.

But it got me thinking.  Some people say that variety has died, is dead rather, and in the strictest sense of the word they would be right.  Although a few acts still continue the good fight in rusty sea resorts and cruise ships, it is by no means the juggernaut of entertainment it once was.  Largely due to the proliferation of TV sets.  With the change of technology, the acts themselves have adapted to sketch shows and light entertainment.  The best example of this, but by no means the most recent, that I can think of is Morecambe and Wise.

They themselves started in touring shows, and when they made their  successful move from halls to living rooms they brought the stage craft and banter that made live variety shows so popular in the first place.

In a way, standards have evolved too, we just call them covers now.  However I can’t help but feel a pang of remorse for the standards of old (again not the women in the kitchen, children should be seen and not heard when the’re beaten by their teachers kind).  I for one would quite like to see Jessie-J rocking out to ‘St Louis Blues’.

Anyway this is just a long preamble to introduce the fact that I have written a song, inspired by the standards of old.  Good thing I can’t sing it at you through this blog, or you too might be wishing you were listening to a golden oldie, belting out ‘Ain’t Misbehavin”.

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It’s short and snappy, and written to be a cappella.  If you read it and find it doesn’t really work for you, try reading it again in four part harmony, that should smooth any bumps you’re having.

Forever and a Day

There’s an old woman, she’s seen it all before.

There’s an old old old woman, waiting by the front door.

Well a man once told her, “Honey I’ll be home soon”.

So she waits, forever and a day, under the light of the moon.

 

There’s and old fellow, works the whole day through.

There’s and old old old fellow, got so much to do.

Well his Mumma once told him, don’t work your whole life hon.

So he waits, forever and a day, until his work is done.

 

There’s a boy, wet behind the ears, can’t wait to grow on up.

There’s a boy, old before his years, too young to want so much.

All the adults they tell him, don’t be in such a haste,

Or you’ll wait, forever and a day, and find it’s gone to waste.

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If music be the food of love… (then where should we post our recipes?)

“If I had my life to live over again, I would have made a rule to read some poetry and listen to some music at least once every week.”

–Charles Darwin

Wisdom of the elder tapes

So music is a funny thing.  My Dad in his sentimental moments (often these accompany his drinking moments) will wax lyrical (aha!) about the importance of music:

“I hope you always have music in your life!” he’ll gesture wildly.  “It’s really” hiccough “really important.”

Usually such statements are sandwiched between “I love you, I do, I remember when you were this big” and “I believe the children are the future, it’s important that they’re better then us.”

Now it may sound to the reader who hasn’t met me that I am being a bit unforgiving or unsympathetic in the portrayal of the loin of my fruits.  Well you’re kind of right, but only because I don’t really know how to interact with my Dad sincerely.  But I will admit, he has a point, music is great.

I have recently started writing music again.  Not because I think I could make a living out of it, or because I like hearing the sound of my own voice (although that is an added bonus), but because recently I’ve been very busy and keeping strange hours and as a result my social life suffers.

It’s funny, for a lot of people, creativity is something to be shared.  To be done in groups and performed/displayed before and audience.  However there is something to be said about the bedroom bards, who may never play for groups larger then one.  There is a lot of solace to be found in a few stolen hours of singing and playing music.  I’m sure the number of people who find this to be true is surprisingly large, but we’ll never know as they are probably holed up in their rooms doing the same.

The problem with this is how do you know that your songs are any good if no one ever hears them?  I suppose before finding an answer to that question you have to ask yourself whether you actually care?

I know in the beginning I didn’t.  It was good enough that I could actually mash out some chords and speak-sing words at the same time, but having revived the past-time lately I find desiring some outside input.  Not just a pat on the head, look you wrote a tune, well done kind of input, I’m talking about actual criticism.  Talking to someone who can say, that’s great, but have you thought about doing this.  I supposed when you spend enough time doing something then you want to eventually get better at it.

Anyway in my quest for self-betterment, I have been ghosting some on-line forums.  It seemed like a good place to start.  No one needs to see me, so I can basically still be that bedroom bard and I can get critique on my lyrics (which for me is the tricksy bit).  Getting critique from strangers is also easier to accept and remain objective, because at the end of the day you don’t know them, and while you are grateful for the time they put in to help an anonymous songstress, truthfully you don’t particularly care about what they have to say.  It’s not going to shatter your muse if they don’t like your latest attempt and heartfelt harmony humour.

Does that sound ungrateful?  That’s not the spirit it’s meant in.  I suppose it’s just a reflection of the times, I can turn to complete strangers and show them things I wouldn’t dream of sharing with my closest friends, not without booze and no small amount of blushing.

So anyway, yes, forums.  I don’t know, it’s hard to pick one.  There was a time when I was young and reckless where I would have just joined loads and that would have been the end of it.  I could tried them all like cheap hookers and then frequented only the chosen few, but I am reluctant to do so now.  I just want to pick one and stick with it, but how do you pick a good one?  What are the distinguishing factors for on-line discussion boards?

It could be that, once again, I’m over thinking this.  Picking at reasons not to share, because I’ve only just got a guitar, I’m not even slightly close to the point where I can record something, even  if it is just on my phone.

Until then I will continue to post lyrics here, at least it stores them some where fairly safe.  If you happen to come across them, please feel free to critique.  If you, yourself are a songwriter and know a friendly on-line place to share thoughts, let me know… please, I promise that while my songs may be below average I have excellent message board manners :)

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I like you but… please don’t ask me to marry you

None of my friends have yet reached the point where they are getting married, but they’ve started pairing off, which as a singleton makes me anxious.  As their friend it makes me happy, and in order to live vicariously through them I have started taking bets.  I don’t know who they will marry or when.  If one of my be-coupled friends is reading this yes, even you.  I don’t think I will ever reach the point where I will want to get married, so I may as well just order the cats now.  

One of the bets I have set myself is how?  How do you pop the question?

As a woman, at least of generation y, it’s not something that is actively encouraged that you take the initiative   Even in this day and age where women can ask for dates, there is still a tradition that you can only ask a man to marry you during a leap year.  I think if I were to be paired off with someone, I would probably get impatient and just bulldozer straight to the issue.  “You are going to marry me.  Why?  Because I said so and just think of the tax benefits.”

So for any women thinking of proposing (or any man who would like to remove themselves from the woodwork and propose to me) I have compiled a list of what I think you should avoid at all costs (because if lists were people I’d ask them all to marry me, even if it meant I would be prosecuted for bigamy   You just can’t help what you fall in love with).

  1. Restaurants:  The problem with proposing in a restaurant is that not only is it unbelievably unoriginal, but it also means everyone will watch you.  While a grand romantic gesture is wonderful when you have an audience, wouldn’t you much prefer an honest answer.  Think about how awkward it would be should your other half not want to marry you.  They either say yes because everyone in the restaurant is watching, and then you have to have the worst backtracking session post initial engagement sex.  Or they say no, and you have witnesses to your humiliation.  Save everyone the hassle  just don’t do it.  Also if you never take your other half out to dinner and suddenly you find yourselves in the midst of some swanky eatery, chances are that years of romantic comedies and trashy TV will have already spoiled the surprise, before she even steps through the door.
  2. London/Brighton/Liverpool Eye/Wheel: I don’t know if the rest of the world has wheels, but it seems that the London eye has obviously been getting jiggy with a Ferris wheel and they are springing up across the UK.  Firstly I hate heights, so I naturally think that they are a bad idea anyway.  If someone proposed to me on a Ferris wheel, I would likely say no on principle and then vom on your shows to make sure you got the message.  Secondly you think it’s original but it’s not, like really not.  I have a friend who takes the pictures at one of these carnival rides on steroids and she must get at least 8 proposals a week.
  3. Where you first met, depending on where you met:  It’s actually not a bad idea if you met on the beach or in a woodland or castle or something (being the romantic that I am, you can see I didn’t struggle for examples here at all) however if you met in a strip-joint or at the local police station then I would safely say that you might want to chalk the experience up to a unique @how we met’ story and move on.
  4. Via text:  Again if you are a person of few words then fine, but don’t you think this particular question deserves an actual phone call.  Go ahead and ignore my advice, but try not to end your message with LOL or YOLO.
  5. Hot air balloon:  Again with the heights, but imagine for a moment that is not an issue.  Short of riding an ornery hippo, I recon it must be one of the more dangerous ways to travel 
  6. Valentines Day:  Because it’s cringy enough as it is, don’t make it worse.
  7. New Years Eve:  Actually one of the more acceptable ways to propose to someone on this list, but it happens every year.  What if they say no.  What should be an evening of celebration for things gone and what lies ahead will always be the day they said “You’re joking right?  RIGHT?!”
  8. His/Her birthday:  Yes it will make it easier to remember the date you got engaged.  But it doubles the problem if you forget altogether, now you have no excuse day to make it up to them.  As an alternative (because I believe in offering solutions as well and raising issues) may I suggest the following week.  That gives you enough time to load up on roses and gifts that may just persuade them to say yes.
  9. Christmas:  You know your stealing everyone elses thunder, especially the person who cooked the dinner and the new baby that arrives with you cousin twice removed blah blah blah blah.  Don’t be a dick.your 
  10. Immediately after asking the father for permission:  First of all, what are you doing? Asking their father for permission?  Really?  Talk about backwards and archaic, try asking the mother if you really want to win your in-laws over, that’s where the power lies.  Besides, she’ll find out before you propose, everyone in the immediate family is likely too, at least in my family.
  11. Vegas:  If she says yes then great, but you might want to ask her before she gets there so she doesn’t  if she says yes, then great but might want to ask her before she gets there, so she doesn’t feel obligated to immediately agree and therefore cheat her out of the wedding of her dreams.  For my dearest readers from the UK, think Blackpool.   In these times of economic crisis, pinching the pennies can lead to more security when you start having to feed the shaved monkeys that pass for children nowadays.
  12. By hiding the ring in food:  Don’t just waltz yourself into the Darwin Awards.  Unless the rock is so big it has to be hidden in a Beef Wellington then it’s a choking hazard, also when there’s food gunked up in the setting it can ruin that moment when you first slide the ring on.  Unless your into that sort of thing, in which case have at, with whipped cream on top. 
  13. By choosing the ring for her:  There is one exception to this, and that is family heirlooms.  Noone wants to mar the happiest day of their life so far, by having to break out their unwanted Christmas present face.  Chances are, you’ve already seen it anyway.  I don’t know maybe they can act and you’ll never notice.
  14. At sea:  Nothing destroys the moment like sea sickness.
  15. Accidentally:  I’m not sure how this happens, but I imagine it’s pretty awkward when it does and is to be avoided at all costs.
  16. While steaming drunk:  There’s a saying from the old country “never make decisions when you’re angry or promises when you’re happy” or propose when you’re pissed.

So those are my nightmare scenarios.  If you disagree or have anything to add, please feel free to leave a comment, just don’t get down on one knee to do so.

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The problem with writing Love poems

So it’s Love with a capital ‘L’, or at least you think it is.  You may never have experienced it before so it could just be a nasty case of indigestion.  Either way your pretty sure it’s not healthy to keep it in.  So you try to express the epic highs and lows.  People do it in lots of different ways, some draw, some cook, the majority of us have tried our hands at writing love poetry.

I find myself in the strange situation of not being in love (in the heart warming reciprocated fashion, it’s more like a school-girl crush or like I’m a child in a toy shop who knows they can’t have what they want because it’s too expensive), but trying to write a love song anyway.  I’m sure there’s a proper way to write music, but I find it easier when I have lyrics first.  Which means I have to write a love poem… and it’s hard (no pun intended).

You see I’m not in love, but I’m pretty sure if I was, it would have to be with someone who made me laugh.  Not that that is a difficult task by any means.  I freely acknowledge that I laugh an aweful lot.  When I’m nervous I laugh, when I’m frightened I laugh, when I speak or breath I laugh.  Laughter is important, and for me it’s a coping mechanism.

So there would have to be laughter, and how on earth does one write a love song that makes people laugh, when I struggle so hard to talk about it with any real honesty anyway.  I think the answer is that one can, but maybe I can’t.  So instead it will no doubt come out just as clichéd and undeserving as any other previous attempt.

But back to the point.  I’m plagued by thoughts, none of them with any real rhythmic quality about what I want to accomplish but can’t.  So I thought in an exercise of self-awareness I would try and post my initial drafts here, because if there’s an off chance that someone might read it then I might actually be bothered to finish it, or at least spell check it.  So here goes:

Send it

There’s a voice in my head lately,

I hear when I’m trying to sleep.

I wish it would stop because it’s driving me crazy,

It’s all I hear when I’m trying to be deep.

It sounds like you, not the real you,

Just a close approximation

I think with some negotiation

We could maybe see this thing through.

But instead it’s got me biting my fingernails again,

I thought I’d quit when I was ten,

but I was wrong.

You’re a monster in the dark, you’re a laugh upon the wind,

You are nothing and yet your with me all the time.

I wish I knew what to say, to make it go away

I used to be normal but now I’m not

I was just starting to get my life sorted out

This close to getting my shit all in line, I would have been fine.

But now I’m thinking I might need to reorganised,

because all I really want is your shit mixed up with mine

You’re the conundrum I can’t fix, you’re the game I’ll never win,

You’re my something, you’re my nothing, you’re a thought.

I wish it didn’t feel like loving you’s a sin,

Its not the world but right now love is all I’ve got.

Now I feel that I could write in an email late at night,

Thoughts of love and bravely hit send,

But I’ve always been a afraid so I’ll change the address name

to my own and because then its not the end.

I know a guy like you can’t love a girl like me,

There are just some things that aren’t ever meant to be.

You’re out of my league at least two feet above,

So I’ll just start a one-sided, long distance love.

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